
Mondays Finish the Story is a flash fiction challenge by Barbara W. Beacham. Here is my story for this week’s prompt in the first sentence below and in reference to the above picture.
The Eye of the Storm ©JK Leahy short stories
Zeus was not having a good day and he made sure everyone knew it. Mack was a mess as soon as Zeus got going.
“Get me a cleaver…”
“Nooooo! Pleease! Oh god – I’m sorry!” Mack sobbed and gurgled as I ran to boss’s collection for a blade. I almost dropped it; my legs could barely keep up.
As Zeus’ knuckles tightened to white around the knife handle, I desperately avoided his predatory gaze, leering at me through the lightning bolt tattoo across his right eye.
“Now, get out” he growled. I didn’t linger.
Mack had hidden Zeus’s package as well as the money. He lied. I warned him that Zeus would not buy it. The kid messed up.
I wondered why you’d risk losing some fingers for a few bucks, and then I heard a chop. Mack’s screams battered the walls of the warehouse, and the echoes shook my bones. I guess you never quite get used to working for a psychopath.
(149 words)
Great write 🙂
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Thank you so much! 🙂
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no worries 🙂
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Dear Fredtotherick – I am still going to reply to your previous nomination and thank you so much for believing in me. That means a lot to me. (Yes – I believe I AM versatile)
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Wow, so unexpected and wonderful – I admire your creativity! Great take on the prompt!
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Dear Yokanda, comments like yours make me want to be a better writer. Thank you so much.
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How incredibly dark, Jocelyn! Great story. 🙂
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I think the name Zeus took me into the dark Lou. 🙂 Thank you very much for reading.
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Wow… this is one Zeus I want nothing to do with!!! Great story!!!!
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Thank you very much – not Zeus – no.
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Very nicely done! I felt my heart jump into my throat when Max got his fingers chopped off. Yikes! A very hard lesson to learn!
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Thank you so much PJ – sorry Zeus is not nice.
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Eee gads! Well done Joycelin! Thanks for writing again for the MFtS challenge. Be well… ^..^
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Thank you very much. 🙂
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You are welcome!
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Yikes! Don’t work for a psychopath – great story.
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You’re not wrong there. And, thank you very much for reading.
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