The Carménère Moment©JLeahy Short Story
Mondays Finish the Story with Barbara W.Beacham
“The only residents remaining in the small town of Miners Hill are spirits.” Uncle Joseph said.
A tear rolled down his wrinkled tired face. The Eastern Belt explosion left several hundred dead last week. The town was evacuated. I watched another tear form and my eyes salted.
“My first thoughts were Josepha, Maria, and Antonia”.
“Where were you?”
“We sat for dinner. I went down to get a bottle of wine from the cellar – only minutes away”, he covered his face with bloody bandaged hands and wept.
My 50-year-old uncle cried as I rubbed his shoulders.
“I…I heard a single explosion, it sounded so far away. I thought it was the daily blasting at mine site. I should have come up. Antonio wanted a Carménère to celebrate Maria’s first communion. I couldn’t read the labels…suddenly I heard the crumbling, screams upstairs and everything went black”.
“Don’t cry, please uncle. They are with God now”, I whispered, as I cried with him.
(150 words)
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Such a tragic tale and so well written, the emotion was palpable.
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Thank you so much.
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Oh such and emotional story, well written, brought a tear to my eye.
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That was so sad and emotional.
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Sounds real and the dialogue is fantastic. ❤ ❤ ❤
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Ohhh thank you so much. ❤
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You are more than welcome. ❤
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This is so sad, Jocelyn. You capture the emotions of the characters really well. Great story. 🙂
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Such a beautiful story but so sad. 😥
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Awww – thank you very much.
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Absolutely wonderful…the narrative is so real and engaging.
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Thank you so much Shivangi. I will visit you soon.
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I truly enjoyed your story Joyceline! I felt as if I was sitting right there with them. Thanks again for writing for the MFtS challenge! Be well… ^..^
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Thank you very much Barbara. This was a tough prompt – but I wrote two stories and one was too much to cut back to 150 words. I may work on a larger piece later.
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You can always do a larger piece. All I ask is that you limit it to one in a month! 🙂 Flexible!
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Hahahaha 🙂 Oh you are so kind. I think my son wants to steal my story that I initially did – 350 words. I wrote three in total and writ ether from different protagonist’s POV. If I do write more – I will send you a copy. 🙂
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🙂 Thanks!
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