SWAMPED (Copyright JLeahy on Creative Writing Wk 3)
The river emptied rapidly as the new day reluctantly begun. The sun had not yet arrived for warmth was lacking. I stood facing the river, able to see the creek. A war that was not ours took many of my family’s lives here, on this customary landmark. The small creek had reduced to a thin flow of a silver running snake. It slithered along a dark swampy path, often picking up flashes of light from the sun on its scales. The flashes only came when the mangrove trees allowed the sunlight trickle through its dense, green-yellow leaves. In contrast to the creek, the river was fuller, darker and moved in a quiet menacing meander. I was the tallest, standing amongst the mangrove stumps. Around me was hazy with un-condensed dew and I could not find my way, even though I had been here many times. I could almost smell the dank, which hung in a strange and familiar blanket.
This is the opening of a short-story (non-fiction) for our exercise in the Creative Writing Workshop – Kenmore. I wanted to share the opening with you. I may post more depending on how the story ends up. It may become a chapter in the JL memoir. I hope you like it.
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I want to read more. What war was it? “A war that was not ours took many of my family’s lives here, on this customary landmark.”
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World War II hiMe. Yes, I will post more later. I am writing several things at the same time, so this story will come..:)
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🙂 Thank you. Have a nice weekend Nomzi.
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Thank you dear. I hope yours is a relaxing one. 🙂
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This is a great example of prose story writing! Please, do go on 🙂
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Thank you very much, I really appreciate that. 🙂
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Anytime! Keep up the good work! 😃
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I like it….but I’m greedy. I want more…lol.
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Thank you very much Lucidleolady – I know you love your stories. BTW I have written more on Pushing Up Daisies. I want to go over it once more before I post. I have been too busy lately.
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🙂 Yes I do. Okay will check it out when you post it. I have a new story too ‘Barriers of Colour.’ Check it out. I have also put up my About.Me page. I have been very busy too. 🙂
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Well done! Send me a link pls 😉
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🙂 Yes I do. Okay will check it out when you post it. I have a new story too ‘Barriers of Colour. ‘ Check it out. I have also put up my About.Me page. I have been very busy too. 🙂
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Some lovely imagery, Joycelin, especially in relation to the small creek as it slithers along. I can also clearly picture the sunlight trickling through the mangrove trees. I’ll look forward to the next episode.
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Thank you very much Millie. I’m glad the imagery is clear. Nathan (my son) likes that line too.
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Good for him. As a writer, too, Nathan evidently knows what works in a descriptive piece. It was lovely. 🙂
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There simply HAS to be more Jocelyn – very evocative prose 😀
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Hahaha, thank you Chris. I will work on it. Thank you so much for your encouragement. 🙂
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Welcome Jocelyn 😀
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Interesting beginning. Before you mentioned this is but the beginning I already wanted to ask if there would be more. 🙂 I DO look forward to m.o.r.e. ❤
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Thank you very much Tess. I’m glad you liked it. Ok, I will keep that in mind. ❤
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❤ ❤ ❤
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