
Mondays Finish the Story is a flash fiction challenge by Barbara W. Beacham. The story requires 100-150 words (excluding the first sentence). The challenge runs from Monday to Sunday. Here is my short story for this week’s prompt based on the first sentence below and the picture.
The Fate of Little Luigi – JK.Leahy Short Story©
“The family had no idea that little Luigi would grow up to be a…murderer.”
The shock was too much to bear as police led Luigi away from the courtroom. He caught his sister’s gaze and his terrifying eyes softened. Martha turned to her mother; they both buried their faces in uncle Dino’s old, smoke-soaked coat.
“It’s not him, it’s not him – I know… I know,” Martha cried. She felt the 65-year-old Dino’s grip tighten as he led them to his car, barreling through the flashing media cameras and the crowd. Many had come to see New York’s District Attorney Martha Luciano’s brother sentenced today.
“Grim Day for Luciano Family”, headlines screamed across the streets in earlier hours.
Three days later, Martha brought Luigi the aged Polaroid of the family that he had asked for. Her eyes salted as she tried to smile. Trembling, she leaned closer to her beloved 26-year-old brother.
“I can’t Luigi…you can’t go to jail for me,” Martha sobbed.
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Thank you very much! 🙂
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It is truly my pleasure!
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A great last line.
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Thank you very much Susan.
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You should be in Chubby Checkers time….and you will be a great twister dancer….Come baby, lets do the Twist….ha ha.
No need to respond as I am always reading your 100 words….
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Thank you very much. 🙂
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Thank you very much!
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Great twist at the end.
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Great story, Joycelin! I love the last line – brilliant twist. I hope you don’t mind me pointing out that your commas should be within the speech marks (“…I know,” Martha cried.)
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I don’t mind at all Lou. Thank you very much. You can keep teaching me English.
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Hmm so I learnt – in direct dialogue, the comma should be inside the quote and the indirect, it can go outside. Thank you Lou. 🙂
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Indirect dialogue doesn’t usually have quotation marks.
Direct: “The tea’s ready,” Mia said.
Indirect: Mia told them that the tea was ready.
🙂
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Hahaha – your language is so confusing. Imagine if I taught you my mother-tongue, Bukawac. All the “ings” and “engs” and “mmm” and “nga”. 🙂 Be in touch for the next lesson soon. Thank you very much Lou.
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I couldn’t imagine trying to write in another language! Happy I can help. 🙂
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Hahaha – I am so pleased you could help me Lou. I always thought it was the other way. Keep teaching me please. I meant that. I am just teasing you like a typical PNGean. 🙂
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I always worry when pointing out things – some people are happy to accept corrections but others can get quite snarky about it! I never want to alienate people. 🙂
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Lou, you are like family now so, just be my teacher. I’m good. Now I am going to check all my work. Your mum once urgently message me because I made a typo in my heading. She saved me. That was embarrassing and quite funny. I can only get better. English is my fourth language, there is a lot of room to learn.
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A wonderful read, Joycelin, and very well written. The story leaves me with so many unanswered questions and a great cliif-hanger. Very intriguing…
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Hi Millie, I owe you an email. Am about to sleep. 1am. I will write tomorrow (or later toady). Two words I removed from the newspaper headlines that could have change the story. “Husband Killed” – now you can make your own story up. 🙂 Goodnight my friend.
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Sweet dreams, JL. 😀
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An intriguing piece of writing. I was not expecting a twist in the end 🙂
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I’m glad you got the unexpected. 🙂
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Excellent last line.
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Thank you very much. Welcome!
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interesting.. leaves you wanting more.. 🙂
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Well written, it lead the reader to want more. The photo era is misleading to your story though. I like your era better.
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Thank you Rae.
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This was one engrossing read. Loved the surprise ending.
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Thank you so much Shivangi. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Loved the twist at the end! What did Martha do, I wonder? Well done again Jocelin! Thanks for taking part once more in the MFtS challenge and be well… ^..^
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You’re welcome and thank you!
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🙂
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Oh my!
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Thank you 🙂
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Great story!! I loved how it twisted at the end!
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Hey PJ – I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Great twist at the end
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Hi Donna – thank you for reading.
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Nice twist!
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Thank you so much.
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Oooh, what a twist. Nicely done!
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Thank you very much Sonya. I’m glad you liked it.
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Almost went for this myself. Nicely done.
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Wow, cool. Thank you for reading and welcome!
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True devotion… wonderfully crafted.
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Thank you so much.
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Lovely story. A nice take on the prompt too. Very thoughtful.
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Thank you very much!
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