This is a unique flash fiction challenge where Barbara W. Beacham provides a new photo and the first sentence of a story each week. The challenge is to finish the story using 100-150 words. This challenge runs from Monday to Sunday.
The Looming JK.Leahy short story ©
The petroglyphs told the story of an unusual event.
The old man’s eyes widened. He blinked from the petroglyphs and stared into the sky. The interpretation led to the present. Something was happening. Yawing, seven, could sense the fear in his grandfather’s voice.
Yawing followed Old Manu’s eyes; the clouds gathered into a thick dark cover.
“What is it, grandpa?”
“There’s no time”
“No time for what?”
“Go! Get your mother!” Old Manu ordered Yawing. “We need to move quickly. It is coming for us”.
“What is coming for us?”, Yawing asked, wide-eyed. He reversed to the door.
“Go!”
Yawing quickly turned and ran to find his mother among the women at the river. He tripped and fell.
“Mother! We must leave, now”, Yawing shouted with a mouthful of sand. He spat.
“They are coming for us!”
Yawing’s alarmed voice chilled into silence, his three little sisters, playing outside their house. As they watched, he ran to their mother.
what a great talent
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Thank you very much.
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Very intriguing- you built up a lot of suspense in a very short amount of time.
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Thank you so much. That means a lot to me.
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A great story, Jocelyn. You build the tension really well throughout the piece. I wonder what exactly is coming…?
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Hey Lou – thank you very much. My bucket of “have to finish stories” is reaching the top. I amy need to stop blogging to do that 😉 lol. One day..
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Good build up of suspense ….Nicely done.
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Thank you very much.
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Oh yes you could make this snippet in to further episodes. Great story.
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Thank you very much Sally. May be I will write more one day. Too many beginnings to complete. I have to catch up.
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Thank you very much.
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I love your earthy realistic take on the prompt Jocelyn ~ I hope the warning came in time!
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Thank you very much John. I have to see where you are up to on your adventures.
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Running, falling, spitting sand, and yet it sounds as though he’s too late? Great story!
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Thank you Yolanda. I am glad you like it.
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The tripping would be me. Love the story Jocelin and I want to know what happens next! Well done and be well…. ^..^
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Thank you very much. “What happens next?”. Depends on your next picture ;), but I have to think it out – like John Yeo’s adventures. He is better at it, really. 🙂
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John is amazing but then so are you! 🙂
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🙂 thank you.
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Great tension building then leaving us hanging. LOL! Great story!
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Hey PJ – thank you so much. As you know, I only have a maximum of 150 words. 🙂
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Yes, I know and that means a lot of flash fiction stories are cliff hangers.
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🙂 I am coming to read yours PJ.
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Thank you! I hope you like it.
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Great story and a brilliant cliffhanger, if you were to continue. I love the description of him tripping anf falling, then spitting out a mouthful of soil.
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Thank you very much Millie – that would have happened to me at some point in my life…eating sand from running and falling. 🙂
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I can easily believe that… you described it so well. Nothing like first hand knowledge.
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Hahaha – true, first hand knowledge 😉
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Excellent! Now I need to know who’s coming!!!
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Hahaha – may be next 150 words. 🙂 Thank you. How is your story-telling going?
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Super.
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Thank you very much.
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WOW What a great start and hook Joycelin 😃
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You’re quick Chris! And thank you 🙂
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